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80-28 How to Write a Crime Story Blurb that Hooks

Abigale Perry

Bonus Cheat Sheet: Crime Story Blurb PDF Cheat Sheet:

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Here’s What to Expect:

         Why do People Read Crime?

         What is a Back Cover?

         What is a Hook?

         How to Write a Logline?

         How to Write a Back Cover?

         Crime Back Cover Case Studies

         Key Point and PDF Download

         Q&A

 

In tis workshop, I’m going to teach you 3 essential elements in an engaging blurb and how to make your crime back cover stand out

        

Why Do People Read Crime Stories?

 

People Love Crime Stories Because …

         - Exciting and Interesting with Intense, high Physical Stakes

         - Feel a Sense of Anticipation over whether a Criminal will be

Brought to Justice

         - Follow a Trail of Clues, Make Meaning of those Clues, and Put

Together a Puzzle Alongside the Protagonist

         - Satisfying Endings that Often Show How Wrongs are Righted

         - Emotional and Entertaining Endings

 

Crime Story: Four Core Framework

         - Core Need

         - Core Value

         - Core Emotion

         - Core Event

 

Core Need: Safety

         - Arises When the Inciting Crime Happens

         - This Threatens Security and Coherence in Society

         - Protagonist Must Find the Wrongdoers and Bring Them to Justice in

Order to Return Order to a Chaotic and Dangerous World

         - Involves High Physical Stakes

 

Core Value: Justice and Injustice

         Protagonist acts on Behalf of a Larger Society or Group to Pursue

Justice for Victims

 

Core Emotion: Intrigue

         - Reader Feels the Desire to Solve the Puzzle or See How It’s Solved

         - After Exposure, Reader Feels Satisfied

         - If the Criminal is not Exposed, the Reader Feels Cheated (Criminals

can Go Unpunished in a ‘Cautionary Crime’ Story)

 

Core Event: Exposure of the Criminal

         - Climax in the Story

         - Often, the protagonist chooses between their own Safety and Victim

of the Injustice

         - May Result in an Internal Loss of the Sense of Right and Wrong

         - Restores a Reader’s Sense of Security

 

All of This can Impact and/or Suggest what Needs to Happen in Your Crime

Blurb

 

Why Write a Blurb Before A Manuscript?

 

Blurb Definition:

         - A Blurb is a Sales Copy that often Appears in the Back Cover of a

Book, and that Writers Use to Pitch Their Manuscript in a Query

Letter

         - It is a Short, Persuasive Description of a Story’s Key Selling Points

 

A Blurb Can:

         - Identify of an Idea Has Legs that Can Withstand the Length of a

Novel

         - Provide Some Direction with a Basic Plan (for Pantsers) or Kickstart

a Plan (For Both Pantsers and Plotters)

         - Act as a North Star that Keeps You On-Track, or Helps You Re-

evaluate When Your Plot Needs to Change

         - Pitch an Idea to an Agent, Editor, or Publisher (Live or in a Query

Letter)

         - Hook a Reader and Get Them to Want to Read More (Grab Them

with an Interesting Protagonist, Potential Arc of Change, and High Stakes)

 

A Blurb/Back Cover Is NOT …

         - Dozens of Pages that Map Out Every Detail in a Story’

         - A Synopsis

         - A Chapter-by-Chapter Outline

         - An Explanation of the Story’s Theme

         - Description Weighted Down by Backstory and Worldbuilding

         - Something Writers Should Avoid Writing

Short: 250 Words Target Hint of Big Events – No Explaining - No Telling

 

Back Cover Blurb for ‘One by One’ by Ruth Ware:

Getting snowed in at a luxurious, rustic ski chalet high in the French Alps doesn’t sound like the worst problem in the world. Especially when there’s a breath-taking vista, a full-service chef and housekeeper, a cozy fire to keep you warm, and others to keep you company. Unless that company happens to be eight co-workers … each with something to gain, something to lose, and something to hide.

When the co-founder of Snoop, a trendy, London-based tech start-up, organizes a week-long trip for the team in the French Alps, it starts out as a corporate retreat like any other: presentations and strategy sessions broken up by mandatory bonding on the slopes. But as soon as one shareholder upends the agenda by pushing a lucrative but contentious buy-out offer, tensions simmer and loyalties are tested. The storm brewing inside the chalet is no match for the one outside, however, and a devasting avalanche leaves the group cut off from access to the outside world. Even worse, one Snooper hadn’t made it back from the slopes when the avalanche hit.

As each hour passes without any sign of rescue, panic mounts, the chalet grows colder, and the group dwindles further … one by one.

 

Crime Formula

Typically, a crime/mystery story follows a basic formula of a body/crime and a mystery that must be solved by the end

 

What Makes a Great Story (and Blurb) Depends on the Story’s Hook

 

Blurb Key Points

- A Blurb is a short, persuasive description of a story’s key selling

points. For crime stories, this description will suggest genre expectations – but not give away the whole story

- The goal of a blurb is to get readers (including agents and editors)

to ask to read more

 

What is a Hook?

 

Bookends Literary Agency Defines as Having Three Major Components

         - Bigger than a Tagline/Logline

         - All-Encompassing Component

         - Makes a Book Stand Out

Jessica Faust and James McGowen suggest these make a pitch-worthy hook

 

Bigger than a Logline

         - A Logline/Tagline is Made to Grab Your Attention in One Sentence

         - It is a One-Sentence Pitch of Your Story’s Big-Picture (or Main) Idea

         - While Gripping, … a Hook is Bigger than One Sentence

 

Still … Should You Write a Logline?

         YES

         - Technically, you don’t need to write a logline to write a great blurb,

but writing one first can help you grasp the big ideas of your story

         - You can then Expand Your Logline into Description that Crafts a Blurb

 

Logline: Four Main Components

         - Ironic

         - Compelling Mental Image

         - Target Audience

         - Killer Title

Ironic: Often, why the protagonist is the least likely person to be the

protagonist

The Genre suggests the atmosphere/tone the logline must have

 

Example: ‘One by One’ by Ruth Ware

         A corporate staff attend a work-retreat at a ski-chalet that goes horribly awry when an avalanche and a buy-out offer test tensions and loyalties, resulting in members of the group being killed off “one by one.”

 

All-Encompassing

 

Through Your Blurb, Your Book Comes Through

         _ Jessica Faust, Bookends Literary Agency

 

When You Read a Blurb, the ‘hook’ isn’t limited to one event or character; it encapsulates the ‘unique’ element that frames your story

 

In other words, your ‘hook” is …

 

What Makes the Book Stand Out

         It is what is unique

 

It is not just

         - the Premise

         - the Genre

         - the Plot

 

It is:

         - The concept that makes it unique, especially in comparison to other

books of the same genre

         - Something that describes the whole story

Once a book becomes a big influence, other stories might reciprocate a hook in different ways (Big Little Lies)

         - What makes the story “same,” but “different”

 

Example: “One by One” by Ruth Ware: this story’s ‘hook’ could be

         - same: a work retreat at a rustic ski chalet in the French Alps

         - different: an avalanche that traps the characters - claustrophobic

        

An alternate method to ‘imagine’ a hook

         Imagine you go to a bookstore and get a “blind date with a book”

         - wrapped in a paper bag

         - what are the words on that bag: the “it” factor?

That’s Your Hook

 

Example: “Spirit” – a movie by Dreamworks

Logline: A wild stallion is captured by humans and slowly loses the will to resist training, yet, throughout his struggles for freedom, the stallion refuses to let go of the hope of one day returning home to his herd

Hook: The story of the West has been told from the back of a horse, but nor by the ‘spirit’ of one (Spirit is the horse’s name)

How this is told determines why the audience loves this story

The hook makes it a unique Western/status story

The back cover – blurb – needs to combine all thiswithout giving away the whole story

 

What distinguished your crime/mystery book from all the others on the shelf?

 

Blurb Definition (enlarged):

         - A Blurb is a Sales Copy that often Appears in the Back Cover of a

Book, and that Writers Use to Pitch Their Manuscript in a Query

Letter

         - It is a Short, Persuasive Description of a Story’s Key Selling Points

         - The Hook of Your Book is an All-Encompassing Component of a Story

That Defends Why It is Different than Other Books in the Same Genre

 

How to Write a Hook-Worthy Blurb

 

Go from Logline to Back Cover

Using to Hook as a continuum throughout this process, holding it together

 

Blurb = Back Cover

 

Blurb

Goal: Write a Blurb that excites the reader enough to read more

- Summarize the sales copy of your book in 1-3 short paragraphs

- Focus on plot + excitement factors

- Get Specific (Don’t be Vague)

- Do not Name more than two characters (Don’t have to Name Any)

- Show, don’t Tell

- Expand on Your Logline

- Don’t Give Away Big Plot Twists

- Don’t Tell the Whole Story

- Spotlight Three Major Components

 

Hint, not Show, Plot Twists or Excitement Factors

 

James Scott Bell: Start with These Three Components:

         - Character and Their Status Quo

         - Catalyst (but then …)

         - High Stakes (now)

Start Here, then Perfect it through Your Narrative Voice

 

James Scott Bell’s Starter Template

First Sentence: Identify Protagonist, their Vocation, and their Status Quo

Second: but when + main plot problem (inciting incident)

Third: “death” stakes

 

Example: Starter Blurb for “The Guest List” by Lucy Foley

First Sentence: On a rocky, eerie island, guests gather to celebrate a smart, ambitious bride (also a newspaper publisher) and a handsome, charming and rising television star groom for their wedding.

Second: But when the champagne is popped and the festivities begin, resentments and petty jealousies begin to mingle with the reminiscences and well wishes. Then, the lights go out and a waitress screams, reporting blood … someone might be dead.

Third. Now, as past crimes come to light, the wedding party must search for answers (and a potential body), before someone – or multiple people – end up dead.

 

Final Blurb

On an island off the coast of Ireland, guests gather to celebrate two people joining their lives together as one. The groom: a handsome and charming, rising television star. The bride: smart and ambitious bride, a newspaper publisher. It’s a wedding for a magazine, or for a celebrity: the designer dress, the remote location, the luxe party favors, the boutique whiskey. The cell phone service may be spotty, and the waves may be rough, but every detail has been expertly planned and will be expertly executed.

But perfection is for plans, and people are all too human. As the champagne is popped and the festivities begin, resentments and petty jealousies begin to mingle with the reminiscences and well wishes. The groomsmen begin their drinking game from their school days. The bridesmaid not-so-accidently ruins her dress. The bride’s oldest (male) friend gives an uncomfortably caring toast.

And then someone turns up dead. Who didn’t with the happy couple well? And, perhaps more important, why?

Note: This expands with specificity, not telling.

 

Use a Story Check

Want/Goal.

         - Bride and Groom: to get married

         - Guests: survive the night. Discover who died and why.

Conflict

         - Old resentments make for a messy wedding, even if it had been

expertly planned

Crisis/Decision

         - Do wrongdoers confront their crimes and seed redemption – or

suffer the consequences

Internal Arc

- (implied) The characters must face their flaws and past wrongs or

risk death (or other consequences)

 

Blurb Definition (further enlarged):

         - A Blurb is a Sales Copy that often Appears in the Back Cover of a

Book, and that Writers Use to Pitch Their Manuscript in a Query

Letter

         - It is a Short, Persuasive Description of a Story’s Key Selling Points

         - The Hook of Your Book is an All-Encompassing Component of a Story

That Defends Why It is Different than Other Books in the Same Genre

         - A Hook-worthy Blurb Emphasizes a character and their status quo

(and vocation/want), an inciting incident that upsets the status quo, and a crisis with high stakes

 

Crime Blurb Case Studies

Key Elements to Look For

- Title: Feel like the genre?

- Blurb

         - character + status quo + want/vocation

         - inciting incident/catalyst             

         - now + high stakes (these will probably deal with death and justice –

(in the crime/mystery genre)

- Hook: what makes this book stand out from others in its genre

 

Story Check

Want/Goal. What does the main character want?

Conflict. What’s the main conflict preventing this goal?

Crisis/Decision. What are two equally weighted decisions, two equally good

or equally bad, the character needs to decide between (that impact main death stakes)?

Internal Arc (suggested) What are the expectations for character

transformation?

 

Blurb Definition (further enlarged):

         - A Blurb is a Sales Copy that often Appears in the Back Cover of a

Book, and that Writers Use to Pitch Their Manuscript in a Query

Letter

         - It is a Short, Persuasive Description of a Story’s Key Selling Points

         - The Hook of Your Book is an All-Encompassing Component of a Story

That Defends Why It is Different than Other Books in the Same Genre

         - A Hook-worthy Blurb Emphasizes a character and their status quo

(and vocation/want), an inciting incident that upsets the status quo, and a crisis with high stakes

         - A Great Way to Study Crime Blurbs – and Get Good at Writing One – is to Look at Several in Your Genre and Identify How it Includes the Three Essential Elements and a Hook – All of Which can be Verified by a Story Check that Looks at Character Wants/Goals, Conflict, Crisis, and an Implied Character Arc. (P.S., Avoid Rhetorical Questions if You are Writing Your Blurb in a Query Letter, even Though You See Them in Back Covers. Rhetorical Questions are usually Telling, not Showing)

 

Final Case Study (Cozy Mystery): Murder, She Barked

Holly Miller’s life has gone to the dogs. She has no job; her boyfriend’s former flame is sniffing around, and a scruffy but loveable Jack Russel Terrier is scattering crumbs all over her borrowed car. Just when she thought things couldn’t get any worse, a phone call about her grandmother sends her rushing home to the family inn at Wagtail Mountain.

The staff – and a frisky Calico kitten names Twinkletoes – adopts Holly and her new dog on arrival. But someone in this friendly town is bad to the bone. One of the employees at the in has been killed in a hit-and-run accident – which is looking anything but accidental. Now Holly and her furry companions will have to nose out the murderer before someone else gets muzzled.

 

Blurb

Character + Status Quo. Holly Miller, jobless, losing interest in her boyfriend, owns a Jack Russel Terrier that is messy. )things are not good overall)

Inciting Incident. Troubling phone call about her grandmother.

Now + High Stakes. An employees at the in is killed in a hit-and-run accident that doesn’t look accidental. Holly and her furry companions need to figure out who the murdered is.

 

Hook

The Sugar Maple In in Wagtail, Virginia, is the country’s premier vacation spot for pet owners who can’t bear to leave their furry pets behind – detective sleuth and her furry companions.

 

Story Check

Want/Goal:

- To help her grandmother – and then

- Bring the hit-and-run criminal to justice

Conflict

- Someone in this town is bad to the bone

Crisis/Decision

- Does Holly team up with her furry companions to solve the murder or return to her unhappy life (and potentially let more people die?)

Internal Arc

- Suggested, Holly has an unhappy life – she’s in a low place, so by the end of the novel she needs to find her inner strength – which can make her happy – before she can catch the criminal.

 

 

 

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